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| uniqueindividual 2008-07-31 ch 1, | abuseawesome!! Such a cool guy, I wish I could know him. you know, if he was real... |
| dolly-dear 2008-07-24 ch 1, | abuseHeheh. I love it. |
| shellbell10 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abusethis was such a good one shot good job |
| Esquirella 2008-07-18 ch 1, | abuseThis was really cute! |
| Feel The Waltz 2008-07-18 ch 1, | abuseI liked it :) I think it could work out as a more lengthier story but oh wells :P Anyway, kudos to you bub |
| Bi-curious George 2008-07-17 ch 1, | abuseThe first line was a bit jumbled... And the tenses kind of switched around quite a bit, but most particularly around the part that started with "The dance was quick." I also wonder how Brad managed to hold so closely to him, and get touchy feely during the dance, but not realise that he'd gotten more than he bargained for? And I kind of cringed at the mention of "'member'". It's oral sex, it's a pretty graphic act, and it didn't seem like an overly romantic gesture, but more of a lust-thing. So why use a euphemism? Meh, that's just my opinion. Otherwise, I liked the character's personality, and I found myself (somehow) not disbelieving that an 18 year old boy could successfully pass as a girl up close. I'm not sure why. As oneshots come and go? It was quite good :D. |
| KickOffYourStilettos 2008-07-17 ch 1, | abuseI liked this, the ending line made me smile. |