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Reviews For: In my Sister's Dress

uniqueindividual
2008-07-31
ch 1,
abuseawesome!! Such a cool guy, I wish I could know him. you know, if he was real...
dolly-dear
2008-07-24
ch 1,
abuseHeheh. I love it.
shellbell10
2008-07-19
ch 1,
abusethis was such a good one shot good job
Esquirella
2008-07-18
ch 1,
abuseThis was really cute!
Feel The Waltz
2008-07-18
ch 1,
abuseI liked it :) I think it could work out as a more lengthier story but oh wells :P Anyway, kudos to you bub
Bi-curious George
2008-07-17
ch 1,
abuseThe first line was a bit jumbled...
And the tenses kind of switched around quite a bit, but most particularly around the part that started with "The dance was quick."

I also wonder how Brad managed to hold so closely to him, and get touchy feely during the dance, but not realise that he'd gotten more than he bargained for?

And I kind of cringed at the mention of "'member'". It's oral sex, it's a pretty graphic act, and it didn't seem like an overly romantic gesture, but more of a lust-thing. So why use a euphemism? Meh, that's just my opinion.

Otherwise, I liked the character's personality, and I found myself (somehow) not disbelieving that an 18 year old boy could successfully pass as a girl up close. I'm not sure why.

As oneshots come and go? It was quite good :D.
KickOffYourStilettos
2008-07-17
ch 1,
abuseI liked this, the ending line made me smile.
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