wow, there seems to be a slight twist .. well for me, considering i didn't get the story at first and had to re-read it again :)

it's kinda dark i guess, but its ..deap. your story was probably the 2nd one that i actually took the time to read carefully out of like .. 200.

I absolutely loved it. Honestly, you worte this so well and with so much feeling that I almost got misty in the eyes. You could practically feel the pity at the end. Your characters are so well developed for such a short story. I really enjoyed reading it.

Alex

Wow, that was shockingly sad and aching. And you feel the character's desperation. He doesn't want to hate and blame winter, but he does, in a way. In a getting bigger way. How do you live with guilt like that. Harvest obviously isn't, not if he's keeping everything out and away.

This is very well done for such a short piece, and you really incorporate a lot of their lives into a few words - depicting the shocking results of am avoidable tragedy.

You have such lovely imagery. Beautiful beautiful beautiful. And the story has such a lovely air about it, melancholy clings to everything like a fog, wistful and longing.

It is quite angst and dark... sad in fact. The description is nicely written and the words seem to flow well.

"When was the last time you saw your parents? A week ago? Two? You should be with them at this time of year, not in a chill graveyard. Not...here." (I especially like this part)

Well done.

Wow. Beyond awesome descriptions. A story that I've been working on has some similar themes that are in this one. I know for sure that my story needs a major rewrite if it's going to have as big as an impact as this one.

Talent man, you've got ALOT of it!

Very nice phrasing and sentence structure. Great wording with the emotions and the way you highlight and blur things.

Love it!

X x

Major ouch.

Oh my god...

I can't believe I didn't get to this sooner! This was so amazingly written, I can't even think of the right words to say that would even BEGIN to describe how truly beautiful this is. And you know how I don't normally like reading second person, but for this it really works. You're so talented, you could make anything work! *jealous*

Well you were right. I feel inspired now.

:D

Very nice babs. Touching. Nicely written.

I'd give you a longer review but I cba :)

I can't believe you only have one review for this, and I get annoyed at people who favorite and don't review too, so here you go. It is absolutely amazing. I adore the way you wrote this. The style complimented the story perfectly and your narrator was unbelievably human. It was terribly sad of course, but in an exquisitely beautiful kind of way. Never stop writing. You truly have talent.

Kali

-screams-

i got a dedication! a oneshot dedication!

-screams more-

i love you, i love you, i love you!

you finished it and and and it's absolutely FANTASTIC.

honest, it really is. it's so SAD. -sniffs- i was whispering "oh my gosh" to myself and my eyes were like this: O.O

your descriptions are captivating and it was really weird 'cause i was listening to this really gothic song at the same time.

it's such a pretty story and a great plotline AND i can understand it too - it definitely has depth and it's so deep.

i can see the entire thing playing out like a movie, that's how amazing i think your writing is. this really is good stuff.

i can't wait for another one of these brainwaves.

thank you for le dedication! it totally rules teh world, my rainbow socks and my...um, cookies. :D