A lovely, beautiful piece! It flowed wonderfully and the rhyming was really well done. I started reading it aloud part way through, imaging children by my side enthralled by the tale. It works as a tale for all ages, really- simple (that's a good thing), and very well-written. Bravo!

That was a brilliant fantasy story, MC! I loved the rhyme-scheme and the flow of it. The story behind it was excellent; just like a fairy tale one would read as a child :).