I liked it... How he didn't know what she was going to do the entire time until she was gone. :) nice writing.

Wow this is just absolutely brillant! So wonderfully written and i did not expect the ending. I absolutely love how you built Caramel's character and then her final moments..just WOW. Loved it. Definitely one of my favourites now.

WOW lovely chapter :))

Okay, I stumbled so bad at the end I read it again. I did not see that coming. It was a good story, definatly a favorite, and I loved that last line.

That was so...sudden. I read it three times, and every time, it just hit me. It was so powerful though. Really, amazing job.

Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. I'm still in shock from the ending; I actually didn't catch that she had committed suicide at first, and I was like, "Wait, what? Isn't there more?" Then I reread the last few sentences, and I was like, "HOLY CRAP!" I totally did NOT see that coming, but I feel kind of dense because I didn't. I thought it was a weird tradition she had or something where she threw away all her artwork at the start of each year so she could start anew. But then the fact that she threw away acceptance letters confused me. But brilliant writing and brilliant ending. I love the "I'll put in a good word for you." Genius. I have to admit that this does scare me a bit, simply because Caramel reminds me a lot of myself; I'm an extreme perfectionist, but I'm actually fairly happy most of the time, so I sincerely hope I won't be throwing myself off any buildings anytime soon!

Slightly {only slightly} predictable, but that's just me after reading too much fanfiction.

Um, other than that, EXCELLENT. I love open endings. I loved the last line. Creepy, weird, and amazing.

Wow! I totally didn't see that ending coming. Seriously, that Caramel girl is messed up, why would you put some poor kid through something like that? I don't think watching someone commit suicide would be anything short of traumatizing. Also, Shiloh was right, people actually name their kid that? Lol.

Anyway, as usual, your writing was eerie and you kept me wondering all the way through. I really wanted to know where you were going and then the end came and my mind just screamed NO! Because I could see where it was headed and...I'm rambling and shall stop now.

Just wanted to let you know that this is possibly one of the best fp oneshots I've read. It's going on my favourites list :D

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Good writing! I liked the fact that you made this a one-shot, but everyting was written very well so that you do have questions after reading, but it doesn't bother me like it sometimes does. Great job, it'll go into my favorites!

Wow...that was depressing. I kind of knew what was going to happen when Caramel said "Because I need a witness." This was a very haunting story and I applaud you. Good work.

That was... haunting is the word for it I think. Although I agree with Amelia Erin, Caramel was free at the end. A wonderful release from a pressured life.

Your use of language was phenomenal for most of the story. At times, especially during descriptions, it was a little stilted, but the dialogue was wonderful.

I look forward to the rest of your stories.
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Hey, you reviewed my story so I thought I'd return the favor. This was wonderful! You had it under tragedy, but it didn't seem like one at all. At the end I felt like Caramel was free. This was really well written. Good job! :D

Wow. That was just the first thought that came to my head when I finished reading the story. That was really well done, loved the dialogue.

You didn't give out too much description on a few things, which I find a good thing sometimes 'cause it leaves a few things to the imagination.

I sort of knew what the ending was going to be about as soon as Caramel mentioned the roof. I didn't get why she was just throwing the things away for, though. I know that she said they didn't mean a thing but if they didn't why would she go through the effort of throwing them off the rooftop of all places? Yes, yes. I know - that would be a good way of getting attention so that people will know that she actually did jump and it was her jumping.

Over all, I really liked it. Nothing I'm saying is meant to be a 'flame' in any way, in case it might seem like that. Anywho! Really good :)

Ooh! Scarred for life!

I;m confused...

Put in a good word for WHAT? Heaven? Do you realize that if you comit suicide, that you go to hell? Who wants a good word put in for them in hell?

But you're dialouge was good.