i know it's meant to be angst, but it was almost adorable for me.
i could see her as a pretty pretty porcelain doll (torn apart, but who cares)

(it won't let me log on--you'll have to forgive me)

i find this very emotional. i love the last lines. actually, i love everything about this piece, to be honest.

i think what people forget
is that all of life's themes are cliche and repeated
and taken from this or that

i thought this was interesting and i liked the shortness of it
it conveyed its point quite well

The style reflects the subject, free and loose. Nice job.

I agree with Ashelin. The beginning seemed a bit cliche to me, but then I read the line "when she tried to cut herself out of her body" which I absolutely love, and the rest seems fresh, honest, authentic...

At first I thought it a bit cliche, but I liked how you ended it. There was originality and honesty in there, which are two things that generally help out a poem. It was quite short, but still good.