"The battle field is the canvas"... battlefield

"Nothing is more disorganised than battle, but is organised until the final charge."... this confused me. The but made it seem like it was organized until the final charge, but then a lot of it organized which means there are plenty of things more disorganized than something that is only disorganized towards the end.

I have to tell you that I thought the word choice was a bad one because it seemed so easy, but what you actually made of it was so different than anything we would expect, which makes the word choice awesome. I also like the metaphor about painting, that was really beautiful and original.

What a pathetic ploy for reviews and attention. Here, I'll give you some words: Pathetic illiterate Japanophile with poor taste in music and books, who must have been dropped on the head as a child because they somehow think that Stephenie Meyer can write, and tries to express their 'individuality' by having a profile full of copy-pasted quotes that are on EVERY SINGLE PROFILE OF EVERY SINGLE PERSON LIKE YOU EVER, YOU STUPID NARUTARD FANBRAT CLONE OF EVERY OTHER STUPID ANIME FAN OUT THERE. Oh, well, that was far more than four words, wasn't it? Go on, make a story out of that. It'll be your life. Then the character can be a self-insert wish-fulfillment Mary-Sue. You'll like that, won't you?

In the third paragraph I thought you got a bit repetitive with dance and embrace used twice in such a small amount of words.

"deaths hour glass"...death's

I really like this one the most out of the other's I've read. You put those words together really nicely and your descriptions were beautiful. The whole story and the way it was told was also just wonderful. The only thing is the the tenses were all in present so at times I was a bit confused if it was a memory or someone else was actually doing it now and that was making him think of the memory. Though maybe you wanted the confusion... lol.

Anyhow it's a really great story, very nicely done.

fp spazzed, this review is for chapter 3 and the other one was for chapter 2.

My four words for the next collections, light, soft, firm, swirl. Have fun.

It amuses me that this whole reaction is the result of a teacher complaining about grades... lol. I like it a lot. I also like the ending how you made it one chain reaction, that really worked well to combine the words.

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"we hurtand it taresat our heart?".. hurt and tears at

I like the idea behind this piece, it's really interesting. I also think you did really well with it. A few things, why did you italicize the word try that second time? Also at the end I think leaving the word to out sounds really odd, I would put it in but not bold/italicize it. Also I might separate it into two paragraphs to make it less like a chunk of words.

Anyway the piece is nice, definitely relateable. I especially like the part about him sayings its not her.

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