I really enjoyed both of these pieces! Great work. Short but a lot said in them

Very nice.

"between snarls of glowing dragonflies,"

Favorite line. But the whole poem was lovely. I could really picture this.

Good piece, I liked it :)
Faith

I loved both of these. I thought they were simple, beautiful, yet complex. Good job =-)

Forever the
ComatoseCatastrophe

I really like your word choice here, its beautiful. Your descriptions are also really beautiful, powerful and interesting making an amazing piece.

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Ops! This is the review for the second chapter and the review I gave for the second chapter is for the first... sorry!

I really like the title, I dunno if it was meant to be about making a wish, but that’s how I interpreted it and it was interesting.
I also liked the phrase about the suburbs in atlantis, that was a really great description, interesting and well fitting.

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love the imagery in the second piece.

both are good pieces. keep it up!
Faith

i like the first line especially, about the suburbs of atlantis, and as far as short poems go i also like the fact that they can evoke so many things at once because of how they're more open to interpretation. this one's done very nicely indeed xD