Jared Way? Interesting name choice ;). Perhaps you could add more emotion into it, right now it's a bit too much dialogue and it doesn't allow the readers to really connect with the characters. Other than that, good beginning, update soon!
saara x
hey steph,
i remember you and amy talking about a story... XD... its been ages since u have posted a story! XD anywayz i guess ill follow the story... so where it goes
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