I dont know if you have another account on here but I saw this story: /s/2737862/1/THIRTEEN and I recognized the summary, maybe you should look at it, I dont know if thats you or someone else stealing your summary

Even though this story has been completed for a while, I assume, I was just looking through stories to read today (procrastination, you know) and this summary intrigued me. I just wanted to let you know that I truly enjoyed your story; I sat here and read the entire thing. I adore the world it takes place in, as well. The mix of science with magic created a unique world like none I have ever heard of before. I can't wait to read your next story!

your story was mediocre; good for a read and obviously a lot of effort, but probably not the best thing you've written. it was charming, don't get me wrong, but, as you probably know, it lacks any sense of urgency and you seem to have changed your characterization of gabby and anjali throughout the story.

however, the epilogue impressed me.

you know your characters and you are confident about them. i can't help but wonder if they are based on people or situations you know. the way the epilogue is, it almost sounds as though you are teasing friends you've grown up with. you have deep affection for these characters, but you are also able to see them for what they are.

it takes at least a little bit of life experience to write something like this, a story of years.

overall, a good work. please keep writing, you have potential.

I still really like this. Congratulations - this is the furthest I've ever read into a story on this site. You've got me hooked.

Oh man, I don't even remember which chapter that I last reviewed, but no matter since I think I love this most of all. LOVED IT. I know it's the epilogue and it's all just telling it how it is so it's very straightforward.

Mostly I love the non immediate happily ever after ending, George and Henry's bromance (oh god I can't believe that word is a part of my vocab now), how talia was a pretty bad mom in a sense (and how henry seemed to take no part in that) and so on and so forth!

Though since you wrapped it all up so nicely, I was kinda curious about Henry's family stuff, but that's about it.

fave line: "Talia had remarked that it was a wonder Anjali was not more wary of George's infatuation for Henry."

Ha, I laughed.

You know, I saw the post on your LJ about this but for some reason (I guess I didn't read the whole thing...) it didn't occur to me that you might have posted it on FP, lol. Either way, you know I love this story and its characters and getting more of them is great. I liked the way you wrote this. It's not the traditional epilogue that many authors write, so that was refreshing. Self-indulgent or not, I'm glad you put it up.

=]

-Sasha

P.S. My summer was great. I know you were busy traveling, but hopefully you've gotten a chance to relax a little now?

I liked it.

Normally you would think that Henry and Talia would be the first to get married, being 'soul mates' and all (and more importantly, the two main characters). It throw me for a loop when it said that Talia moved away. But I think the scenario you thought up is MUCH more likely than a normal 'happily ever after right away' ending that seems to happen in a lot of stories.

It was a good chapter. And a great ending!

ROGLOL

Silly Talia, thinking she could leave Henry like that. I always feel like such a sap, but I adore having happy little endings like this to tie things up. And hooray for Gabrielle! I'm glad she met her boy-man. :)

I'm exceedingly sad that this story's over, so you'd better start writing something new for me to read! (yes, you're probably busy, but you have readers, darnit! heehee) How did you come up with the idea for this? Was it just sort of something random that popped into your head, or did it come from somewhere? (And do you have a hard time getting yourself to finish stories? I know that I have a beast of a time getting past the beginning and into the bulk of it. I always have these ideas I think are fantastic, then a few pages later, I'm realizing I know what I want to happen 5 chapters from there, but I have no idea how to make it get there. I suppose I just want to know if I'm not the only one like that?)

But I digress. Yay for this story. I loved it!
And I'm looking forward to seeing more from you. :)
-Tin

Epilogues are funny creatures, aren't they? I always think (way) ahead with my stories and wonder if an epilogue would be appropriate or not. Part of me really, really wants to write them, especially if you don't tie up all those loose strings at the end into pretty bows--you know? Part of me always wants the fairy tale. But then the literature snob in me is like, "No! Leave it alone!"

That said, this was pretty adorable. I don't think it quite fits the tone of the story, but I do think there's a lot of valuable character information in here that, should you ever go back and revise, could really help bring out more of these traits in the characters. Mostly I'm thinking about Gabrielle. What I do like about it a lot, though, is that even with the happy endings for everybody, you've made it somewhat realistic (well, as much as a story about fairies can be ;p)--they all have to grow up a little first, go out and experience the world on their own, and figure out who they are before they can tie those knots. Which is totally rock. Kudos again, darling.

Random side notes: I saw that you revised Liberation Girl, so I have to go check that out soon. And on LJ I saw your haircut. CUTE. I have long hair now myself, but I do miss my short hair days. ;]

yes, that was lovely! okay I really didn't expect Talia to leave henry behind like that, but it all worked out in the end, so it's okay.

Awesome.. nice Ending.

Oh my goodness. This was so good. I loved it. It makes me want more of this story. But I do love the way it ended. Thanks a-million!

Shame on you for your self-indulgence! ;)

Seriously, though, I thought it was good. Gabrielle had her spotlight, which I think you were wanting. For some reason, it seemed like you felt like you didn't do her justice (judging by the ANs), so I think that you really brought her character out a bit more in this. We made peace with Gabby. Aw.

I,too, feel that epilogues are pretty self-involved. When I read your author's note, I felt pretty guilty. I've done it, but we get attached to the characters, so we need that kind of finality, even if it is just for the author's own peace of mind. Personally, I loved it.

Everyone did their own thing, which fit. I mean, life goes on. You can't just stay together forever. Things happen, and..well, it's life. I knew that Anjali and George would get together.

Talia needed time away from Henry. She needed to go out into the world and discover herself, and you showed it brilliantly. She found another guy, but she realized that, as much as she loved her new life, she couldn't run away from her old life. She needed to reunite with Henry.

It was a great epilogue--not sickly-sweet. It had realism in it, and, although I admit that I felt bad when Talia left Henry, I was able to empathize with why she did. Just watch, other people are going to read this review and become prejudiced because they think it'll end badly. (I'm guilty of reading other people's reviews before reading some things, just to see what their opinions are of them.) It doesn't! :)

So, this is the end. Either we can take a moment of silence and feel slightly depressed, or we can celebrate because you've finished! It's done, has substance, and there's been a finality added to it.

Sequel, anyone?

Hopefully I made you smile, Writ. Either that or you're reading the review in horror, asking "What is she THINKING?" I hope not. That'd be awkward... Right, well...this story has been enjoyable, and it'll be forever on my favorites list. Unless, of course, you publish it and remove it from FP. Then, it'll be in my bookshelf instead. ;)

I like this a lot, so far.

great writing. i loved this epilogue- I think it fit very well with each of the characters. and of course- it wouldn't be the same if Talia and Henry didn't rekindle their romance.