I absolutely love this. The flow is amazing. Just the whole feel of the poem. Absolutely amazing.

I didn't like the rhyme scheme, it went a bit all over the place.

I did like the piece though, the description of the room spinning was really nice and I also liked the ending.

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I like the whole rhyme scheme you have going for this. It fits the piece well. The flow is there but the only thing I would say is that instead of saying,
"The room is spinning round and round"

you should have said

"The room is spinning 'round"

I think that would've kept the flow of the poem more fluid. Other than that, good job.