its gd!

just extend it a bit more make it longer

more tales more lives different povs an charecters

Good short story, even though I've read it before!

That was awesome! While I was reading it, my heart was pumping, and could almost feel the eyes of the audience regarding me just as fiercely as you; I was really disquieted and stressed. That was quite well written and pithy, as I could follow the scene aptly without being dragged down with description. You write quite well. Good luck.