Ok you have got to write more!! Dont leave me hanging!!

Your prologue is great.
I love the way that it pulled me in and makes me want to read more.
I really want to know what Jack does, and if they end up getting married in the end.
Personally, it seems like the story can take any kind of turn, and I'm eager to read more because I'm really pulled in.
Also, I think the character relationships are done well so far, though they are just being introduced.

Another good chapter, I'm looking forwards to reading more. I really like the way you brought Hale's past book into the story a little bit, that makes things really interesting and Dodger sounds cute. :D

Hey, whats up!? Anywho, never read one like this before, so it was pretty interesting, like the first time you ride a bike! lol! I'm used to diong fantasy stuff, but, it's good to try something new.

Okay, first of all I love the first person perspective and how she seems more avergae than being all into the justice thing. How we can relate to her, especially when she says "I just want to be home writing my books." most of us here are writers, so yeah, I can relate!

I also like how you were able to throw comedy into the mix as well as the trial feeling pretty realistic, though I didn't know he was a man till later on, probably due to me reading a later chapter. Oh, and giving one insight into the courtroom as well.

~SD

This is just as good as The Ghost Writer. But I find myself itching to correct the tiny, harmless mistakes. Would you mind if I copied it, corrected the small stuff and sent it back to you?

I like your opening paragraph. It really sets the mood perfectly and grabs your attention. The dialogue is very believable, it fits the situation perfectly which really draws you in, like you're actually there. Excellent work!

nice ending and forewarning. ominous. their little meetings just spring up out of nowhere.
very interested in "and why Hale has so much empathy for her"
yup, looking forward to the next chapter!
-to me the storys going great. i dont see the over crowding of characters. but if you arent happy with it then ya gotta find the problem before it drives ya nuts.

Another wonderful chapter. I can't wait for more. :D

The opening for this chapter is a great hook. The description of the fog and the emptiness and calling it a ghost hunt builds a suspenseful atmosphere that pulls the reader along. But it also keeps the dry humor characteristic of Hale with the mention of the Twilight Zone. Nice.

I still adore Hale’s character, the way in which he deals with everything, from casually following the automatic writing and hunches he gets to the annoyance he feels at the dog digging up bones. He’s getting to be an old hand at murder investigations and its showing as his ability to detach himself increases. It’s also nice to hear him reflect on how he used to feel towards the automatic writing, it shows development from fear he felt at first. It’s also interesting to learn that Hale’s automatic writing started after Cora’s death.

I don’t know if you’ve made who Cora is clear or not in this story so far, I’ve read Ghost Writer so I know, and of course things will be revealed eventually, but a brief refresher mention is always good too. It also puts Hale’s relation with Juan into perspective more to have that brief memory of their last interaction, now we know that Juan had been planning to get back at Hale from right after Cora’s death, and he took a long time preparing.

Well now we know why the journal said beware of dog. The plot remains interesting in this chapter, and progresses nicely now that we get a break from the courtroom and the loose ends of Ghost Writer which kept the new mystery from developing for a while. By introducing the assailant you give us a possible culprit for Stacy’s murderer, but he will undoubtedly remain a mysterious and distant figure for a while. The plot for this story it different from ghost writer in ways that keep it interesting and fresh, which is a nice change when people who write mystery/suspense stories can fall into a rut repeating variations on the same plot. It looks like this one will not turn out to be a personal vendetta and that the ghosts here are more active with the automatic writing.

I really enjoy this story, the suspense is good: well written and well paced. The characters are likeable and interesting and there is a good mix of humor and more serious elements. Also, I don't think this chapter drags.

“Stacy did not crossed out these random comments.” ‘cross’ instead

oh. this was a good chapter.
oh, i hope you dont get writers block or something awful like that!
its not stacey? ok. yea, but i bets its a human bone! ... maybe.
hes got great senses that guy. and i still find the 'automatic writing' amazing.
onions. hm. itd be funny if thats how he finds the guy. bad breath!
"silently wondering why this always happens to me." youre a superhero thats why!
update! keep it going.

This was a good chapter and it didn't drag, it was interesting all the way through. I like how it seems that Hale is getting mixed up in something different... or something that at least seems different at this point. I'm interested in seeing if you bring the two cases together. Keep writing! :D

even though it took me a couple days, i'm glad to see that you've updated. and i'm still very hooked on this - i can't wait to read the next chapter.

oh creepy chills.
great update. more please.

So nice to have an update.

I liked the cross interrogation and the feeling of weirdness/similitudes in the Nadya interrogation!

Thanks!

Yay!! Another chapter!! XD

I enjoyed this chapter as well and I'm hoping that Hale will be able to find Stacy Skyler's killer even if he couldn't save her in time. Please keep writing because I really want to know what's going to happen.