"Every little drop separates,/dancing into the wind as they free fall."... every little drop is singular and then you use they, which didn't really match up.

The descriptions in the piece are really great, especially in the last stanza, I like them a lot. I also like the simile in the first stanza, that was very unique.

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I like the last stanza a lot. It uses a lot of interesting metaphors that gives this poem a lighthearted feel.

I'm not too fond of the second stanza. It uses some big words such as "hypothermia" and "crystallization" that don't seem to fit the rest of the poem.

Keep up the good work!