i feel this chapter was a bit short almost like chapter 3 & 4 should be combined. anyway it s a good chapter. hope you write more.

great story! sorry for the late review i was out of town. update soon plz!

kind of a strange kid. breaking glass with your voice... anyway i liked it. i only noticed two things this time.

Jinius was not a cruel boy, and he swore to his mother that he would keep his voice at a normal frequency and not spilt other people's ears. replace the word spilt with split.

Jinius cleared his throat and began, "It was a dark and story night--" when the sandy haired girl shouted "Cliché!" and Jinius glared at her once more. There was something odd about her...
replace the word story with stormy.

Still, it's really really good. I love the dialogue and characterization. It's all very well done.

- Koki

another cool chapter. i noticed a few things so i made some notes. anyway hope you write more.

"It was her second day at her new school, and as soon as she'd stepped through the door of her shop class, they'd handed her a hammer and shooed her outside where the rest of the class were digging holes in the ground and hammering things". in this sentence they'd should just be they.
“Fetch me a tea, would you?” i would say delete the a and add some. unless your going for a dialect.
"Puffy had called her that yesterday, and she founded that she wasn't too fond of the word". in the sentence change founded to found.
"She threw them open and marched over to where the large crowd of cooler was" the sentence isn't right but i don't know what you wanted. either its a single cooler where you should have written "She threw them open and marched over to where the large cooler was" or if you meant there were several coolers where you should have written "She threw them open and marched over to where the large crowd of coolers were"

i love it so far! update! plz?

Hahaha! Very amusing; you have a great talent for writing dialogue. That and "He reminded her of a puffer fish" is the best intro for a character ever. Brilliant piece of writing!

interesting title i almost passed this story up. a good read. great description. i hope you'll write more.

Hilarious! I love the Puffer Fish analogy. Very well done -- not to mention I've never even seen it done before! The narrative is quite funny as well. I can't wait for more!

- Koki