I like this!

I like that you describe all of his actions using her senses, and I wonder what happened to change everything. It left me feeling very curious.

Nice work!
Katie

Your comparisons were definately interesting. I think I liked most the first stanza, because I could definitely relate to it. The whole thing was very well written though, and the last line seemed to wrap it all up, but leave us with that lovely mystery. Not the cliff-hanger sort, but the kind you try and figure out on your own, but are totally satisfied anyway. Well done, keep up the good work.