I can't believe your're leaving me hanging like this. Looks like its been a long since you last updated. I hope it won't be that much longer before you update again. I love the ending bit. I'm wondering what it all means. Was Hookah thinking Ollie was a lover and when he said he wanted to fuck that that made him a fucker. Or did Hookah assume he was a fucker, which would explain going right into the blow job without preamble, and then heard something in Ollie's voice when he said he wanted to fuck that made him think that Ollie really was a lover and it was just more than Hookah was looking for. Do you see now the mental agony you put me through with an ending like this and me not knowing when you'll write the next chapter. I'm not usually into first person perspective alot, but I'm getting sucked right into this story, so update please...no pressure.

I think this is a great start. It all feels really familiar. Driving to nowhere with friends and whoever else is looking to drive to nowhere.

lol, hookah confused me.
i like das though, and i love the story so far. keep it up (:

Hookah makes me laugh.
Do we see him be smarter
See chaos theory?
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Lame haiku!review is lame. Whatever. I wanted to fully inform you that you are full of win and Hookah is full of win and bathroom sex is full of win and boys in bathrooms are full of win because HAHA THEY JUST GOT TRAUMATIZED.

The answer to all their problems is prostitution.
Either that or being crazy drifters that rob houses and do odd jobs. Posing as illegals or something.

I'll stick with, 'wow, I like your characters and your writing style is neat'. I'm sorry I'm not praising you in a more eloquent and articulate way.

Update soon please-please?

I'm hooked on Hookah too! xD It's marvelous and interesting. Keep going, don't stop! It's so good.

yeah ur doing this right. uh-huhn. ur doing a damn fine job coz i'm HOOKED. ha. ha ha. geddit? hooked? hookah? hooked? xD

...yeh ok shutting up now. i'm making me want to punch -myself- in the face, and even though fight club was an awesome movie, pain isn't really my thing. so.

mmk itz 5.45 in the fucking morning time to slep. or yeh. um. sleep sounds good. but no srsly? love this. can't wait for the next chapter. good luck with writing the rest, yeh? xD

i love the characters and stayed interested. more please :)

I adore road-stories. They're so homo and butch at the same time. This is a veryvery good start. It's very textured. We politely ask for more :)...

Hey, I really like the premise of this. I was confused in a few areas that seemed a little random, but it's a fun read so far, and I'm excited to read more.

This reminds me of Lars Eighner, which is a good thing: do youknow where it'd going to end up?

Love it

Hookah is way cool. And by way cool, I mean more original than some of the other characters that get splattered all over FP.

I approve of this story.

Shall wait patiently for update. Yesyes.

I thought you did pretty good. You kept me intrested, and i like your characters. Ima look out for updates :)