This is a nice, well-written piece with refreshing ideas and phrases. I found the beginning a little hard to get into--the style was slightly jolting, or perhaps I was just a little sleepy, heh--but it improved as I read on, and the main part of the text flowed extremely well. I especially LOVELOVELOVE your last paragraph, with the quirky facts about butterflies and fish. Excellent and unique. The only thing is I find the very last line unnecessary. Normally, circulation/repetition is a great technique, but I don't know...I thought the story finished beautifully without it.

That really hits the nail on the head as far as describing wanderlust goes.

~SirScott

OH, WOW, IT'S A METAPHOR. THAT'S LIKE, SO UNIQUE. AND YOU TALK ABOUT BUTTERFLIES AND RAIN. IT'S NOT LIKE EVERY OTHER EMO KID AND WANNA-BE WRITER OUT THERE HAS WHINED ABOUT LIFE THROUGH A, WOW, METAPHOR.

Uncreative, uninspired idiot.