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| :D 2008-07-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseHi, Doll. Nice story! Very creepy. Found a few typos, though, "Then why don't you stay with u in the room," Beth suggested, "Nothing would happen to you." They agreed and left. Me and Beth colapsed into laughter. "Yeah right!" Beth scoffed. The word "u" I suppose is supposed to say: You "So I did what any good friend would do, I silently crept out of bed, snuck up behind her, and grabbed her sholder suddenly. She jumped and gaspd, and I laughed." The word gasped. NICE STORY,BTW. |
| la la la la 2008-07-23 ch 1, anon. | abusedo u ever wonder what it would b lk 2 sit on a cloud. we should try it some time hey j... |
| Chikojiro 2008-07-23 ch 1,  | abuseToo short! aww, everything went so fast and then they were safe like nothing happened and it wasn't scary at all... Anyway, good story. Continue, the characters are worth it. |
| Becca88 2008-07-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseCreepy. Interesting to see where you take this. |
| Izumi-no-Junko 2008-07-23 ch 1, | abuseNeat, The end made me wonder if she was really the one who got back in her body or not. I like the ending, really neat. I throughly enjoyed it |