"I give out a sudden yelp, followed by a string of unpleasant words that would send me straight to hell if being gay wasn't already a sin - said my priest"
"It makes my cheeks clench - and I don't mean the ones on my face."
"I think if his hands were people, it'll be like having three really hot guys feeling me up - but with normal hands because - like his hands are sexy as three guys so"

your imagery and humor and creativity is beautiful. there's a lot more that I chuckled at. :)

steamy!

Bravo, bravo i bow to you hehe, lovely oneshot.

It was hot and steamy in that coffee shop if only for a video camera. it is a shame that these characters are only for a oneshot, but that was still WOW! very well writen.

i loved it :)

:D Quite an epic oneshot. I really enjoyed reading it- you've given the characters a good... I dunno, Vitality? Life? And the lemon was humorous and very sensual. It's sad it's only a oneshot, and I bet you'll get more requests to write more about them. This is the first of your writing I've seen so far but based solely on this I'mma check out your other stuff.

Hehe, very cute. Loved it. Wonderfully written.

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx

The lemon was hot! Amazing!

FAVORITES -presses button-

Ooh. Like the use of the present tense here, it makes the action so much more immediate and intense. I also like how much Noel swears, as if the pent up sexual tension inside him is expressing itself aggressively. I also like the fact that he's slightly ashamed and feels a little bit insecure next to someone who's so happy with themselves and their sexuality. Good job! xx

it was very well written, and I will definatly have to check out your other story. Until then, I have to get off.

Chez

Hehehe. I like how you used 'groan' and 'grunt' when referring to the kissing, rather than 'moan'. It makes it seem a lot more realistic .

And, tbh, I found this just as funny as I did...lusty?

Either way, it looks like I've got to go uptown in the pouring rain now. So for now, I shall bid thee good day!

Hm... this is interesting, but i honestly think this would be better as a long story.

I love Noel. And Thomas. And this oneshot. It wasn't awkward at all!

Bravo! You developed the narrator so well and didn't overkill with detail, and it was still a pleasure to read. Great job.

AHAHAHA this was SO amusing, the cake shifting, the sex ed references, the whisk and all of Noel's random thoughts. I also liked how you ended it. I adore both characters *grins*

Keep writing X3