I think this was good.
I thought the last line was really sad:
"But beside that thought, I also knew that that would never happen."

It was an alright story, but I wanted to see a closer relationship with the father and son. The way it's written it should be a character driven piece, and it just didn't come off. With a little rewriting this could be good.

It was pretty good. What do you mean by the book in this sentence? "He was to face the greatest champion in all the land, but in my book, he was nothing compared to my father."
All-in-all, it was really pretty good.
Your friend,
Glory =]