 fleur de l'est 2008-08-13 . chapter 1This is vague, which is what makes it so relatable I guess. A very cold tone with a hint of sadness. (This is irrelevant but it kind of reminded me of the song "Tired of Being Sorry".) The whole thing about your paths crossing was really thought-provoking, though my favourite line is "And I cannot fit into your cupboard".
Anyway, great structure, almost like a dramatic monologue. I just loved the message, and how thoroughly you presented it. I shall save it because one day it will prove useful..
~fleur |