This was a well written prologue. You did a very good ob of explaining the icy atmosphere.I got a little confused at how the sentences were cut, but other then that it was really nice!


Thank you for R&R HoPS!



~much love and many hugs~

Niki

lol good chappy . . . ^.^ me already read it before but i just read it agian!! Hehe c ya tomorrow!

hia jesse!! It's laura in case u didn't know ^.^ I love the story but one thing i noticed that im not sure if u did on purpose or not- Fay calls the twins by there names when they didn't tell him what their names were!! 0.o i love the story so far and i do think you should end the chapters with the journal entries!!

So far, I really like the prologue to your story. I love the description that you used and the mystery that surrounds this secretive “Eglise Noir”. It's a little short but, eh, it's a prologue - it can be. Might want to work on dividing your separate thoughts into distinct paragraphs? It's just a little confusing.

Well... I'm sure that the next few chapters will be great and I will most certainly be watching for the next installment =]