>.< yay! you updated! i thought you had stopped...i'm glad you didn't and that's so cool your working on somethin ya wanna publish i'll have to check out “Everlasting Requiem” when i have time ^.^

Why? Why? Why? why did you change Kai's name? *crawls into a corner and cries*

Hey Keto,
I liked this chapter. I dindn't notice any glaring mistakes but I wasn't looking for them so... I really liked at the and where Sam acts a little bit feminine. I t's a different side that you don't really see. Keep up the good work and I want to see more! :D

i think first and foremost, it was almost weird not introducing the story with one of your crazy and confusing prologues that i've grown to know and love, but i really liked the straightforward approach that it began with right off the bat. character development is, as always, lush and full of intricate details, making it a breeze to relate and understand who these people are throughout the course of the plot. sam himself is a great lead, especially with the probable steamy involvement of sven omigawdkanjitattoos

and like i previously stated before, it really is like a modern day and believable version of harry potter, something i really enjoy. i think the strongest trait you have with your stories is the ability to differentiate between them with such rich atmospheres and storytelling, making it never a dull read and always something really unique

i guess you're persistant for a reason, huh?

oh! my gosh this sounds so cool! poor sam...i totally freaked for a bit, i'm glad everit saved him! update soon please! ^.^

Haha, I love Everit. "I hate idiots." xD
Drunk people are scary. x.x...
Update soon? :3

awesome descriptive devices, really a great chapter,

My only concern is that the park was very hard to visualize... Also I've been thinking about the first chapter and I noticed that yopu mentioned some things being cliché...

I feel that by saying that these things are cliché you alienate your audience and take them away from the story,
If you think somethings cliché you should say it in your comment about the chapter and just take it completely seriously in your work, even if sam thought it was cliché ýou need to articulate this in a way that doesn't distance your reader

But you're the writer not me, this is just my opinion...
I honestly cant wait for the next chapter (and thanks for updating them so quickly)

i love the story's new feel, it's wonderfully written...

i miss the old names though, but i do like the new spin on the characters and thier roles

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but i still miss kai

omg! i haven't been on in ages, so i thought i'd check out the story...

i still have a word doc of the original that i read from time to time (random i know)

i cant wait to read this!

thankyou!

For some reason, I like Everit already. xD
Anyways, great chapter! Update soon. :3

Oh, so far I like how you've changed this one a tad! Update soon, please? :)

not that i particularily care...but burying anything, human or animal, is illegal to do because of the possibility of spreading disease.

but like before, i don't care, it's fiction, lol.

read your previous version and am looking forward to the changes in this one

Spot on again "Sefi." lol

Keep it up. :)

Ooh, this is kind of creepy. I'm looking forward to see what happens.