hi, i like this piece it is short but powerful. the ending though it didn't flow with the rest of the poem worked because it just made the ending stand out even more. i like the way you compared her to money and wine. your poem is very unique and i like your style. this would make a good song if you expanded it. :)

I like the similes (the money that wouldn't be missed; the glass of wine). Two minor spelling errors that you might want to deal with to make this flow better: "severs" to "serves" and "glace" to "glance".

Well done.