I think it flows pretty well...Maybe, though, instead of having it all bunched together, you could separate it a little more. Like taking the parts in parenthesis and moving them down a line. I find that helps the flow when your reading sometimes.

amazing poem. i don't know why you don't like the flow, i like it, i think it adds to the poem.

and using harvey dent quotes - MORE AMAZING

i have seen that movie 3 times already and i can't get enough of it )

I'm sorry you don't like it, but I do. Just my opinion. Keep it up :)

Faith

Man, that movie was freakin' awesome. This peice is good, just not 'goodgoodgood' like you're other ones.

-please don't hit me for that!-

Beautiful piece, but a little scary. If you need to talk or anything, I'm here.