Wow! This is super duper good! I can't write poetry to save my life! Beautiful...

I really like your last line, but it doesn't flow. Also your second line I would take out the word dark. It is implied and makes the line too wordy.

Other than those two lines, this was a good poem. It flowed nicely and I liked it. Good job!

Beautiful job. I especially love the last line. I loved the water imagery and your diction. Keep writing, k.

Personally I loved it, but as I read it I could conceive how some people would say that it may be a bit melodramatic in its use of images. Nevertheless, they would be, I believe, in the minority. The last line definitely was really good. It was a very apropos and insightful perspective and note, clinching it all together. Once you got that last line, it was like an epiphany kind of feeling. The emotion and lesson definitely supersede the techniques, but you rhymed well and the meter was smooth. Thanks so much for this. I liked it a lot. Keep writing. :)

Me again! I really liked this one! I love how descriptive u were and how u put old things in a new fashion making it that much more interesting.
One bad thing, though (:(). Did u mean to make the sentences run-on or was that just a typo? Anyways, it's nothing serious, though!
Keep writing!

Beautiful poem, sad, but beautiful all the same. The imagery was lovely too.
Really well done!
Thanks for your review!

~QueenVixta x