Your poems are like bullets in themselves: often short, always powerful. I loved this one too. The fragmented way it was written and the smoothness it could be read were really remarkable. Perfect clincher. Your endings are always quite solid.

i realy like this type of POV writing..good job...but maybe you shouldn't tell the reader who the perspective is from...it gives the reader something to imagine and figure out! Overall really good!

That was very creative! I especially liked how you made it shaped as a man's head. You could stand to use a few more commas, but, other than that, good job!

That is cool! Great insight.

-W. Griffin

I believe for a short poem it is quite powerful. It makes you think. I like a poem that makes you think. Great job!

i liked how you 'entered the mind of someone else'. i think it's effective and well done.

The last line didn't flow. But you told a story. I liked it. Good job.