What a chilling little work of fiction. The doctor figure portrays such a methodical, "just doing my job" sort of evil, and I hardly even notice that it's in the second person because that part is exceptionally well done. Considering that the second person is rather difficult to use effectively, that's quite an accomplishment.

I love your descriptions. And I love how the writing style feels natural, even though second-person is rare and hard to pull off. I was a few paragraphs in before I even realized it was second person. The whole idea behind this piece is very creative and interesting. You have me hooked. I see that it is complete, but I have added you to author alerts. If you write more sci-fi stories, I will definitely read them.

I am sorry, but I hate the doctor! Doesn't he understand that the child wants this? Just because it is different, doesn't mean it is bad!
In fact, I wish I was that child, so that I may be able to fly.

What a bizarre piece (in a good way!) The doctor is so wonderfully sinister...and you did it all with his dialogue. Amazing! It sent a chill down my spine. Oh...I'm going to have a nightmare tonight, hahahahaha. Anyway, really nice work yet again!

This is quite intriguing good job,
especially the growing of the wings.
wow
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I want wings =[ so sad...that was good writing =]

Oh wow. This piece took my breath away. It is so beautifully written. Well done.

beautifully written, so descritive, I could almost feel the sensations myself. And very interesting message, I will have to think about this one for a while...
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I wonder if that is how Archangel from X-Men felt. Well written! I could almost feel a pulse as I read it, speeding up with "you"'s excitement, slowing with disappointment. I saw nothing to suggest. Well done, once again.

sounds like a promising fic. do write on! =)