wow, this is really good.
the first two lines completely drew me in, and you have some other really beautifully crafted lines.

i would love opinions from a writer like yourself on my work, it would mean a lot.

[her winter skin slides
beneath his trembling fingers—]
Great way to open this. Amazing imagery; I could picture the scene very vividly. Also, great use of alliteration to really show the meaning of the words.

Great piece overall. The ideas were wild and freeflowing without much structure, but I liked that. It really let me get lost in the emotion of the piece and focus less on the technicalities of the writing.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

I liked this very much, it flowed very well. good job(:

-sapphire

beautiful description! nice word-usuage throughout the entire thing, brilliant.

Nicely done! I love "her winter skin slides / beneath his trembling fingers-", it really is very descriptive and sets up the idea for the entire poem. The alliteration of the "s" sounds is nice too. The questions are wonderful - I love how they mean the same thing, but are worded differently.

This is an awesome poem!

Please R&R,
W Griffin

"can he live like this forever?
can she live like this any longer?"

i liked those lines, super good.

I love how tactfully and skillfully u handled this topic. Very smart and clever "his house makes him ill,but so is hers", it is subtle and yet there! Juxtaposing their thoughts and the akward verb strings all add to the kind of tortured undertones. "Unloved and overloved" very poignant. Great as always! :-P