I liked this piece. It was simple, yet still powerfuly in its own way. You have a really nice style, and I really like your descriptions. The ending was so cute. Keep it up! :)

This is very good. It's interesting how she wants to fall in love but is afraid to at the same time. I really like the lines: “Fall for me.” and “Only if you promise to catch me.” It was a good ending, and I didn't think it was too predictable or sappy.

This was a sweet piece. But I believe that it would be a lot more interesting if you elaborated on the characters with at least a few more small details.

Otherwise, good job!
-DV-

i can totally relate to what you're character's saying in the beginning. i loved the last line. cute

Hey great story, you just need a few adjustments. The end was a little to predictable. Have to guy do something completely out of the ordinary, something the girl would never expect. Don't actually have him say the words. Have her read in it in his eyes. That would intensify the whole story. Since this is written in first person you could get away with stuff like that.

Is this a one shotter or will you be continuing? Would love to read more.

Aww... touching. There are a few things that can be fixed:

“Fall for me.” He requested in between his panting.
Make it:
“Fall for me,” he pleaded, panting.
"Request" seems too weak.

Yeah, once again, work on dialogue.

Very cute. =)

I thought the ending line was a little sappy, but then again it wraps up the story nicely and I'm glad that it ends on a happy note.

'We let our hearts slow down from its accelerated beating' - did you mean 'from their'?

Anyway, keep writing!