Whoa. This was intense. Congrats.

Normally I'm into less flowery prose, but this was written incredibly beautifully.
And this- "God. What a hoax, what a dreadfully meaningless word! What a lie to say that such perfection might exist in this anguished and repugnant world, where creatures of the night lurked 'round every corner and haunted every shadow! That in itself was blasphemy, if such an idea truly endured." Amazing.
If this were published, lit nerds would be quoting that all over the place.

beautifully written. nice work!

Wow. I want the guy. He sounded so very nice.

I love your writing. It's just so perfect and flawless. And I'd love it if this wasn't a one-shot.

Wow, your prose is lovely! It's so poetical and fine, my Lord. I saw only two typos - "I amthe fool, girl?" and "poring" instead of "pouring". But - but your tale is well-written - and grammatically correct throughout - and I'm going into ecstasies over that internet oddity. I dislike Mary, I am curious whether the vampire was a priest in the beginning because of the murmurings, "no longer a man of God", I want to know where this is going, and sincerely I hope this is not a oneshot, since it doesn't feel like an ending but a teaser. So please let's have some more chapters sometime. An excellent job.