This is extraordinary. The images you create with your words are so vivid...I'm quite breathless. If you're interested, I'd love to Beta your work. I'd be honored to.

This is a wonderful piece of writing, cleverly constructed so that past mixes with present mixes with future. Although abstract, your lively metaphors and similies give the whole thing a unique energy which made it enjoyable to read.

- gold against the soul

I really like this :) The writing style is very eloquent and flows smoothly, and the descriptions of the characters are very in-depth and engaging. Nice job!