|Reviews for Kindergarten|
| ArekuKawaii 6/11/09 . chapter 1
That is a cute and slightly disturbing peice.
The last few lines make me think of a pedophile honestly.
I did like the description of the raincoat because it was so fantastically vivid.
| Beast King 4/25/09 . chapter 1
That was a sweet and touching story; i liked it. It seemed to be building up to something and for the short time it took me to get to it, I was full of anticipation. In my experiance, stories like this usually build up to either a very touching and fuzzy-feeling inducing ending or a horrifying one. I'm so glad it was the first type.
| Cirien Phoenix 2/11/09 . chapter 1
I loved the descriptions of the memories of childhood! They were so accurate and well rendered. I actually stopped for a bit to think about that time and place long gone. This was just awesome. I loved it. I was a little worried at the beginning though that he was sorta stalking her, but the way he reminisced was just soft and warm enough that the creepiness didn't last long. Great work.
P.S. Thanks for the review on "Font Haiku." As a graphic designer, fonts are important to me. I thought it was about time someone put something on fictionpress as a tribute to their glory.
| Elennar 2/2/09 . chapter 1
-FOR THE REVIEW MARATHON-
Hey, I really like the way you've depicted the thoughts of your POV character here. The way his mind drifts from kindergartens, to art projects to cherry was very nicely done.
However, I think I'd like this story better if the ending hadn't been quite so...lacking in closure, somehow. Also, there aren't any pointers as to WHY love has been lost.
| pretty colours 1/18/09 . chapter 1
cool story, how old is th person though modern age and all i was a little creeped out at the end with the poor inocent kid and the strange adult that was randomly coming to see the playschool.. anyways if this is somthing thing youve done personally take no offence!lol good story,kept me entertained anyway!
| fallenangel417 1/18/09 . chapter 1
Your choice of detail was great. The "threadbare rag" blankie, her "cherry" coat, and the "playground wedding" that was "sealed with a kiss beneath the slide..."
My favorite part was when your "other thoughts [washed] around you," and you suddenly remembered the cherry color. I think every reader can relate to that stream of consciousness.
| QTgirly 12/14/08 . chapter 1
This is absolutely adorable and beautifully written! This is the best writing I've seen in a long time. You tell the story in such detail that brings a flood of emotions and memories, even with the story differing from my own experience. Please don't ever stop writing! The only thing I noticed that needs changing were two occassions where you wrote "you" instead of "your". (I would love if you could read and review my story- "Love Beyond Red Roses". I have a feeling you would give really well rounded constructive critisism.)
| Sexy Vampirechick 11/27/08 . chapter 1
I liked in paragraph three you showed how many kids first started kindergarden and didn't want to leave their mothers and go with their was very well written.
I didn't get the ending that well though,maybe that was the reason why I didn't like it as much as I should' did the Cherry come in?What drew the character to the girl?Maybe you could elaborate on that.
| Mayday-Avenue 10/27/08 . chapter 1
I really liked this. It made me remember times when people at school were just friends with each other, and it made me miss it.
| Isca 8/30/08 . chapter 1
A very cute/sweet story about the carefree, blessed life of children :)
| VelvetyCheerio 8/13/08 . chapter 1
Aww, so sweet. A reflection on a life long past and never to be regained, I suppose. Very nice. VelvetyCheerio.
| PoetryQueen 8/8/08 . chapter 1
This was pretty good! Except the summary leads you to believe it will be mostly about the person standing in the rain and not the little girl. Also, She reaches from your hand in a companionable manner, I think you mean reaches for, not reaches from.
Still, this was an excellent piece! All the good memories, and laughs. Great job!
| ShockingReality 8/2/08 . chapter 1
I really liked that. It was so cute and sweet and simple, a nice little story about all those little moments in kindergarten that you always seem to hold onto. Ahh, the marriages under the slides...everyone I know was married and devorced several times before they got to grade two. Good times, good times...
| Ciel the Winged 8/2/08 . chapter 1
This story was really cute. Those descriptions of kindergarten reminded me of...well, when I was that young. It really wasn't that long ago, but it still seems so far away...
Nice job. I think a lot of people would really be able to connect with this.