I love how that person seems so fake yet so real at the same time. This poem seems to have multi-personalities (sort of?). I also love the parallelism structure here. Good job!


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I like how there are feelings and actions, but the last line hints at other feelings. A fake person is asked to explain the feelings they've brought upon themselves. I have no negative comments for this poem. It's whole from my point of view.

Great job! Write on!

The title made me think of the Keane song, but it wasn't like that at all... lol.

Anyhow why didn't game and crowd rhyme? That disrupted the rhyme scheme, which bothered me.

Other than that i liked it. The rest of the rhyming was good, not forced and your formatting with the three words together & then the yours and the dashes worked really well to create a flow. The italics in the last line were a nice touch as well.

this is really good.. i like how it mentions being fake because that's (for me, at the very least) a part of how it feels to feel like that. good use of short sentences with overwhelming amounts of emotions in them. =]