Hai there. I remember reading this and thinking how INGENIOUS it was because of how original the idea was in general. As far as the macabre things go, I've always thought you've had something of a knack for it.

I really, really liked this. But it was a bit annoying how you'll try to emphasize words by capitalizing them. Or it could be me lol. Good job.

This is very different. It's darker than a lot of things on here, and very original, and somehow, that adds to it's power. You brought out a lot of things here, and the story flows really well! This is just ace!XD