"A bright rose of blood appeared on his shirt, and that made me sad. I had really liked that shirt."

Um...lol? Was that meant to be joke, because it felt kind of out of place in such an intense story. It was kind of funny, but in an uncomfortable way.

that's a really great story! i love how you ended it with that sentence. but i wished you'd added in a little more detail, though. but it's really... my kind of story. :)

Damb this is good! The shock factor is excellent, and I like how our victimized protagonist is just as cunningly cracked. It reminds me so much of a short story I read, The Boy Next Door, only this is a lot less boring.

Cool. I like it.

Okay, um. I like the story. But, perhaps you could review the spelling in it please. Okay, thanks. umm bye.

i think it's a great premise, but you don't execute it very well. too much telling, not much showing. if it were a film, it'd been scary, but in stories, you should try to.. i dunno, embellish it with something. anything that will add the mood of the story.

thanks for sharing..

Haha, very clever. Nicely done.

That was creepy and I liked it! It leaves a cliff hanger, makes you think. Or maybe thats just me... either way I enjoyed it. Good job.

Oo, I like it. Very original, I like this character.

were the heck did this come from... this is the tale of some insane chick! much lk urself.. i dont like this girl. i think she could use a banana in both ears.

Awesome twist at the ending. Well written, good job.

Wow, that was freakin' creepy. It was REALLY good, very realistic. I love your writing style. Keep on writing!

Haha this is good. However, there are a few misspellings. But other than that, this is great.