Oh! How dare you leave off this way for over a month! (Heh...I'm one to talk :S) Sorry it took me so long to read this. But I don't have any criticisms, yay! XD Seriously, though, I didn't catch any little (or big) imperfections. You've done a really good job. And now I'm impatient for more! But, alas, I shall have to wait.

'Til next time!

Haha, she was all ready to run after him, and he was right there. XD

It seemed a few 'the's were missing, but I don't remember anything else. (I need much more sleep.)

Hmm...so yeah, as I said, the writing is more improved now, though it's rather simplistic--not saying that's a bad thing, mind you. And I just remembered you (somewhat) explained about the potion thing used on Acadara's eyes, so my curiosity is rather sated now. :)

Until next time.

Okay, so I might as well forget about that review thing, 'cause here goes another one. :P

The use of "they" in the first paragraph and in some other one irks me. Why? 'She' is singular; 'they' is plural. I know you probably wanted to maintain some level of suspense/anonimity (sp), but it's grammatically incorrect. 'Through' was spelled "though" somewhere. And that's all I remember, though I know I'm forgetting something. -.-

Hmm...wonder what happens now that the prince overheard Acadara saying those things... Oh! I think that was another thing I meant to point out. When the prince was observing her and it said something about Acadara going along quitely, it seemed contradictory--'cause it also said something about the way she mused over the things she passed, which the prince couldn't have known unless she spoke, no? And was she talking to the horse or something when she said those things about the prince? It wouldn't really make sense for her to have been thinking aloud.

M'kay, so I hadn't thought to review 'til I reached the latest chapter, but I just had to say I liked this chapter; it was far more improved than the previous one, in my opinion. I hardly noticed any grammatical/spelling errors, but I do remember there was two parts that needed a little polishing. One was near the beginning, though I don't recall where or what exactly, and the other was when Acadara was staring at the field (?) she'd nearly fallen in. It said "fell in" but should've been 'fallen in', unless you remove the 'had' from that sentence.

Anyway, as I said, the writing was really improved for this chapter. So props to you. :)

Hey again. So she's royalty. Hmm...can't really say I was surprised.

Some of the paragraphs kind of confused me--the one about the weaving and the one when the prince is browsing the records, for example. I think you should really split them both up into smaller paragraphs, and in the former, I had to read it and the one before it twice because it wasn't really clear that he was looking at the weaving; it was referred to as a "roll," which I had no idea what you meant by. I thought at first it was a bedroll or something and that the prince was gearing up in all those things described. -.-

The chapter also contained some typos, but I don't remember where or what words. Sorry.

I like this chapter best of all. ^-^

Acadara was a bit... =\ I forgot the word, but she reacted almost without thinking--though I can't blame her. I expected the prince to react negatively but no so much. Royalty. Hmph. Lol.

Anyway, as I said, this chapter has been my favorite, so far. Until next time!

Hehe, I was right. :)

Hmm...I like the twist in the clichéd prophecy thing; the unicorn is an interesting take.

Daran...I knew that. XD

There are a few more misspellings: 'definitely' is spelled...well, 'definitely', not 'defiantly', which means something totally different. XD If you want, I can PM you with all the little imperfections later.

'Nyways, still pretty good and getting more interesting. =]

Cute. What exactly was that paste thing? O.o

I'm liking the story so far--a bit unbelievable (why would the queen pick her? and a paste that cures blindness?) and few misspellings, words MIA, and punctuation errors, but still pretty good.

There was a part where a dividing thing broke a sentence in half-ish.

Anyway, this story is cute, simple, and fairly easy to read. I like the names Acadara (though I don't really know how to pronounce it, and it seems a rather strong name) and Leidra. I don't remember the prince's name, though. (I think it started with a D-a...?)

I already have an idea of what will happen, but let's see how right I am. :)