This will be a critical review, rather than one just of praise. Thank you for the read!

What you have for the first chapter, I can’t critique, with regards to content. The chapter was vague enough not to be a story in and of itself, but still gave enough details to be appealing. Congratulations.

As for grammar, and other such things:

- "I said...be ye saint or sinner? Answer quickly before I'm forced to take your pretty little head for my collection!"

The way the second question is phrased doesn’t fit with the older English style that you mostly adopt throughout this chapter. It sounds very much like what a modern day psychopath (from movies) would say, if modern day psychopaths chopped off heads for entertainment.

- The woman's eyes rose in painful gingerness to view the Red Queen, who sat surrounded by gold in her royal throne. The room was menacingly dark as tar, save for red lights to either side of the queen, illuminating her taught, pinched face in bloody adoration.

The way this was phrased is bloody confusion. She’s surrounded by gold, yet the room is dark as tar?

- She is mute, she wishes herself dead!
- Where are you, why do you not come?!

Two independent clauses here, in both lines. Separate them with a semi-colon, or a period, or some other suitable punctuation mark, or one of those elongated hyphens (like —). Otherwise, it’s grammatically incorrect and poses as a distraction from the reading.

I hope my review helps!

This is a good start. It looks like it's going to be an interesting story, and you've done a good job of grabbing the reader's attention with this prologue. I'm definitely intrigued.

So far, so good!

- Koki