Now this is what I'm talking about.Someone unafraid to get edgy with their pieces. Good work.

I think my favorite line was the last one, because it sort of drove home how this has affected her, at least to me.

Oh the last line was good "Just like the other six" I don't think it needed the ... :P It is more solid and cold and demanding with just a period on the end of the 2nd to last line.

I like how you describe their relationship as being like the one he once had with her. I would like to hear more of her emotion (or... is the point that she doesn't have emotion anymore)? I don't think that you needed to rate this M... it didn't have anything graphic in it at all. I don't think you need to say "Above such childish emotions" after the tears and tantrums - the tears and tantrums speak volumes in and of themselves.

-Jesse
Attack of the review marathon! (link in my profile)

Ah... another story XD

Simple yet not, terrifically evil, and so much like you. Perfect! :D

Thanks for writing this,

-Iris

p.s. I'm glad Hameln and Petetie Rouge are back up again. :)

p.p.s. Sorry I took a while (again. Baha)... term 3's a busy month XP

p.p.p.s How are ya?