|Reviews for Braces|
| DanceLikeNo-oneIsWatching 3/9/09 . chapter 1
WOOT! I just got my braces off four hours ago! Sorry, I'll actually get to the review here in a sec. Just had a moment of glee. ANYway...
I really like how you make it seem so silly that biting into an apple is such a crime with the line "But don't tell a soul!" It really adds humor.
I thought that since you described it as beeing a haiku, you really should have gone with that format. A haiku goes
5-7-5, not 5-8-5 like you did. You kind of have to stick to the format or not call it a haiku.