I'm back and alive :)
I'm sorry I'm going to tear this apart...forgive me in the end? It's all for your writing!
You lack description. The beginning is marvelous and gives you the idea of a this wise man. It's a great feeling and really draws the reader in, but you go to a niave character, and if you want that, make a break in the lines so it's clear that you're switching who you're telling the stories from.
The dialogue, while is real, could use description. When erica points at something, like the door, say shes doing so! It will make the dialogue make more sense and will help the story. It will also add more substanse to the story. At this point, it seems like it's a script, and you're trying to convert it into a story, slowly but surely.
I really like the idea of the story, how original it all it. It makes me drawn to the story and I honestly want to see whats going to happen next!
Like I said, not dead, just getting up from winter hybernation! :P

Not THIS one! *grumble*

Here's your review. I'm _not_ reading your NaNo.