 AK the Twilight 2008-08-13 . chapter 1Aside from some formatting errors, this was a pretty straightforward poem. I'm assuming this has something to do with vampires, after reading a few of your other works, and this is good. It shows a pretty straightforward situation, the pulsing redundancy in the dripping of blood. It creates a mysterious panic.
This was pretty good for being so short, though the final word "relax" adds a degree of mystery and serenity.
Overall, good job. |