This is a sad poem, but it's very touching. Keep writing. Thank you for the review.

marie

wow...

i can relate to this so much...and yet I can't think of anything beneficial to say to improve this, because such a thing isn't possible

for what it's worth...thanks for writing this.

very nice wording here, it's given a dynamic edge, all in all you did a great job.

I utterly adore the ending.

And the only aspect I don't like about this piece is that you end every line in a comma, which seems unnatural and stilted to me. Other than that, really nice work.