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Will Sachiksy 2009-06-05 . chapter 1
And I reply: don't we all? Haven't we all? It's one of the stupidities of life that we spend so much time wishing to be older...and realize when we're older that we were idiots to wish so.

I like this poem. It has a child-like simplicity soured by the adult-like free verse, diction and form fighting with each other. I also like the telling contrast between the idea to "steal a child's eyes" and the idea that a child has an "unbiased soul,/...infinite purity." Nice subtlety there.

However, I would like to have seen more specifics on what caused the change from childhood to adulthood. You hint at this by juxtaposing "mismatched clothes" and the conforming aspects of school, but the latter seems undeveloped as an idea in this poem. Also, the apostrophes after the O's are unnecessary, and the apostrophe after "other's" should be moved after the "s." In addition, the lack of end punctuation in the first stanza is jarring, but that may just be my taste.

Best Regards,
Will
a silenced revolution 2008-08-10 . chapter 1
A relatable, simple and well-expressed concept.

I think the middle sentence of the last stanza would be better ending in a period than a question mark, and I don't think the O's at the beginning of the poem need apostrophes.

Otherwise, nicely done.
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