heck yah!

frickin awesome. you know how to make cliffhangers.

thanks for bringing it to fictionpress.

oh god... you're such a tease. Handin' out such a frustration built up story and leading it towards satisfaction then BAM! the end. Dang! I really wanted to see exactly when things get heated and they realize how perfect they are together. But other than that, wonderful. Truly splendid.

Haha. That showed him, huh?
But honestly, what the hell? 'She's just a bang' - Yep. I was 'this' *fingers about a millimetre apart* close to hitting him over the head (if that was possible) after he said that. Gahh! Boys...*shakes head*
Stupid remarks like that encourage those poor deranged albeit misguided fools. Gosh.

*ahem* Sorry got a bit carried away there XD
So.. I loved it ;)
The dialogue was believable!
The girl had a backbone.YAY. (So, she cry. Her cruch was all ape like with a she-devil, give the girl a break)
So... the critism...Well, you see here.. it was only one itsy bisty thing..

I wanted to read MORE!!

GOSH. I want to Know what Katie does. Jeff's reaction, what the hell happens to the *cough* she-devil*cough* I mean racheal. Details woman! I want more details!

P.s Teehehehe the dammit doll was tres cool ;)

This was cute. Really, really cute. I love the ending--it's open, so we can interpret it any way we want to!

Hahahaha...there were a lot of creative stuff embedded in this story. I love the dammit doll and the part when you narrated using the weather report jargon. Anyhow, a bit open-ended, isn't it? But, still, a good one-shot. :) Keep writing.

GAAH! AMAZING! would you consider continuing this one-shot for a couple chapters? Maybe even one? : )

Hi!
This was so cute!
the ending, I absolutely heart it XD
thanks for a great read. (:
xoxo

i love the dammit doll!! you should create a line..lol. cute story.

Cute. I wish you hadn't left it hanging though!

HA! After reading this, I need to get myself a "Dammit" doll! Pretty cheep for some good "anger venting" stimulation.

That was a great story, but i think it would have been better if you wrote what was Jeff's reaction AFTER the kiss. Good job, though.

Loced it so so so much! Especially the DAMMIT doll!! XDXD Highlight of the whole story for me!! LOL

I loved it.

oh, leave it to the reader's imagination!! The protagonist in this one-shot was hilarious. well written!

omgg i totally want to know
what happends next =)