i love your story please update soon :)

ohh...
why do you like to disturb some other life?

don't you ever think of your family is there?
or something like that

Hey! Your story is excellent, well done! You've got me hooked! Please update soon.

Bella

"fore"--"for".

"My Mama"--"My mama". If you were calling her just mama like as a title, it would be capitialized.

I like Sebastian's save at the beginning. Nice work. Keep writing!

~Twilight Starr~

I liked hearing the past history. Good job with the ending line. Nice work. Keep writing.

~Twilight Starr~

I like the narration. It was very good. Nice work.

~Twilight Starr~

Hello miss boo, it's me. I already asked you this on Twitter, but I'll ask again. I like the revision, and it's also good for me, because I'm very good at forgetting what happens in the start of stories. Um, why did you decide to tell the readers that Shay and Tristan end up together? God, I just spoiled the story. Unless she maybe ends up with Tyler, who killed Tristan or something. Now I'm rambling, so I'll stop.

Hurray for sarcasam!