|Reviews for heartrace|
| Little girl Big world 3/26/11 . chapter 1
i like this. and while the idea of hearts colliding is an idea that is used often i really like the twist you added here and how you made "heart racing" into a heart actually racing, like its a car and the heart collison would be like a vegicle collison. i alsolutely love this metaphor and the more i think about it and read it the deeper the metaphor could go. this was a wonderful and very well crafted poem and i really enjoyed reading it. definitely add this to my favorites :)
| tonight we bloom 8/5/09 . chapter 1
wow, beautiful metaphor! and great job carrying it all the way through. it worked really really well.
all in all a wonderful write.
| lael1bologna 4/19/09 . chapter 1
Wow. This is really...good!
| dragonflydreamer 12/27/08 . chapter 1
Very interesting piece. You managed to say a lot in so few words. The last lines in particular were very interesting. The personification (for lack of a better word) was used nicely, and the meaning is so true.
[sliding suddenly around a sharp/corner. hold on tightly.] I didn't particularly like this linebreak. I think you were going for the feeling of the "sharp corner," but it felt too jarring compared to the rest.
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