Nicely written-with a good amount of suspense! Especially the "You never knew?" part.

Keep on writing!

hey! Hey! It's a snazzy story! Three thumbs up! (I found your story of Fb. :P gotta love it!)

this was extremly good. well written, good topic, and sad twisted ending. i love it. it is one of the best fictionpress stories i've read. i didnt expect that to happen. are you going to continue it? anyway, in a few spots you could go bacand reword it, but oter than that it is perfect.

This story is so addicting. You should write more stories like this one-I love those childhood friends turned to lovers. Poor Dawson-but props for Nathan.

Oh. That's was really sad. Nice story though.

Cheerz!

Wow. That was a brilliant one-shot. I loved how everything was introduced to the story, and how you had no idea what exactly was happening until the end.

Only one bit of concrit: "'Nathan!' she heard herself call out subconsciously." This feels a little passive and the sentence is a bit too long for the hurried feel that's going on in that particular part.

Anyways, I loved it. It was definitely well-written and I enjoyed it thoroughly.

This one-shot was awsome! It was so sweet. I found this through the link you put on gaia.

You have an awsome vocabulary! Though I did see two mistakes. other than that it was really good!

Aw...that was really cute. I didn't expect it to turn out how it did!

Beautifully written, I love it!

Aw. Such a sweet ending. Thank goodness Nathan was there for her.

Nice work!

- Koki