This story is so addicting. You should write more stories like this one--I love those childhood friends turned to lovers. Poor Dawson--but props for Nathan.

Oh. That's was really sad. Nice story though.

Cheerz!

Wow. That was a brilliant one-shot. I loved how everything was introduced to the story, and how you had no idea what exactly was happening until the end.

Only one bit of concrit: "'Nathan!' she heard herself call out subconsciously." This feels a little passive and the sentence is a bit too long for the hurried feel that's going on in that particular part.

Anyways, I loved it. It was definitely well-written and I enjoyed it thoroughly.

This one-shot was awsome! It was so sweet. I found this through the link you put on gaia.
You have an awsome vocabulary! Though I did see two mistakes. other than that it was really good!

Aw...that was really cute. I didn't expect it to turn out how it did!

Beautifully written, I love it!

Aw. Such a sweet ending. Thank goodness Nathan was there for her.

Nice work!

- Koki