hello! i love all the shorts -- clean and precise but straight to the heart. keep it up!
xx

More!!

aww me love it!! It was soo sweet.. and then so hrt-breaking...

nicely written.. but the end is a little confusing since you refer to both men as "he" and so i have to figure out which "he" ur talking about...
but i luv the "punch line" -- "He's waited too long."
hmm.. now i just realized did teh other guy wait for 779 days?? in that case he waited longer than the 1st guy...
ok now i think i really am confused.. are there even 2 guyz? 1 that is waiting for the perfect moment and the other one that she shows up with at the bus queue?

i still maintain that ur style of writing and tone is really good :) the end just needs to be clarified for me. :)

This is lovely. I've written something similar, about those possible relationships.
Fascinating, and heartbreaking at the same time!

this was lovely, thank you. [:

Well, I like the way you have depicted the main character. He seems like a shy romantic, in my opinion.