Unrequited love is a painful, though full and inspirational subject. You make some great examples concerning the feeling of being around him, while simultaneously illustrating the unrequited side of it. I found lines like "my sun to lighten the day," a bit cliched and stale, but a majority of the poem continued its true and heartfelt state.

This was a very emotional poem with plenty of strong meaning to back it up. I hope this subject matter improves for you in its real state. Keep up the great work.